Patricia Abbott (pattinase): Give me a first sentence

Isnin, Mei 09, 2011

Give me a first sentence

It's happened. I cannot think of a story to write. Throw some first sentences at me and maybe one of them will click.

28 ulasan:

David Cranmer berkata...: Sylvia transported Mitch to familiar heights of pleasure as she straddled him on the large oak bed.; 8:03 PTG
Mike Wilkerson berkata...: She asked me if I wanted to fly.

Cranmer...we know where his head (the big one, not the little one) is at!; 8:13 PTG
Todd Mason berkata...: She put the gun on the table, and then a knife, and then the Taser.

"Your choice," she said. "Seriously, could you hold them all for me? I don't want them on me where I'm going tonight. Wouldn't be smart."; 8:20 PTG
Todd Mason berkata...: "Don't move," he said in a harsh whisper. "It's on your shoulder."; 8:21 PTG
Todd Mason berkata...: She tried to remember what had first drawn her attention to him. I might've been his haircut, though she would never have admitted it...he'd've been mortified.; 8:23 PTG
Todd Mason berkata...: "It might've been his haircut..." that should've been.; 8:25 PTG
pattinase (abbott) berkata...: David-those first few months of having a baby in the house can be challenging. HA!
These are all too funny. They could almost be part of one story.; 8:30 PTG
Unknown berkata...: As the the young woman stepped up and over the basement threshold, the sun's warmth touching her bruised and battered body for the first time in six long months, she made a silent vow to herself.; 8:30 PTG
Jerry House berkata...: It was during the tender part of the movie -- the part where the audience usually starts to weep -- that Kay began laughing.; 9:31 PTG
Todd Mason berkata...: If so, Patti, there's definitely an implication of what would be on her shoulder.

Though I did suffer a big bug's bite once on the shoulder when engaged in a certain relevant activity...; 10:00 PTG
Paul Bishop berkata...: The last Camel died at dawn. I flipped the butt in the gutter and decided I better get the killing done.; 12:53 PG
David Cranmer berkata...: Mike, Ha. No comment, sir.

Patti, in the second sentence have the guy that Chandler talks about come in with a gun and kill the girl. Instant start to noir.

Or else you have your first Harlequin. :); 6:29 PG
Charlieopera berkata...: "Who's the ape?"; 9:02 PG
Graham Powell berkata...: "Looking back, I suppose it was kind of foolish, but after six hours of drinking it seemed like a good idea."; 9:09 PG
Tanpa Nama berkata...: Just before the sweat in his eyes blinded him, it seemed the trees were closing in and he would be crushed to death.

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She knew she was taking a chance crossing the bridge with the river running so high, but when she sprained her ankle halfway across and dropped the gun into the water, she knew she was in serious trouble.; 11:58 PG
Tanpa Nama berkata...: Okay, except don't use "she knew" twice in that second one...; 12:01 PTG
George berkata...: I screamed.; 12:19 PTG
Loren Eaton berkata...: It's a universal maxim: You never want to receive a call after midnight.; 12:47 PTG
Rob Kitchin berkata...: Kenny hated key lime pie.; 4:41 PTG
Rob Kitchin berkata...: Except for an aged bar tender who looked like he'd started his shift the previous morning, the only other patron was a middle aged woman nursing a bottle of pale ale.; 4:53 PTG
pattinase (abbott) berkata...: Good ones all and I think Rick needs to take up fiction writing.; 5:38 PTG
Ron Scheer berkata...: So late with this, you'll probably never read it, but how about starting with a last sentence...; 9:24 PTG
pattinase (abbott) berkata...: I usually write a story to find out the ending.
But I may try it if something doesn't click soon. Maybe it can be an enigmatic last sentence.; 9:55 PTG
Tanpa Nama berkata...: I'll take that as a compliment, thanks.

Will we ever know if you decided to use one of these, or more likely if any of them gave you the nudge you needed to get started on your own idea?; 10:26 PTG
pattinase (abbott) berkata...: It was indeed a compliment and if I use one, I will let everyone know for sure.; 7:26 PG
Mike Dennis berkata...: Detroit is the kind of place where you don't want to get caught off guard.; 3:19 PTG
pattinase (abbott) berkata...: I have a story to go with that. I have a friend who hated her years there.; 2:34 PTG
Kent Morgan berkata...: Ann Arbor, I don't remember it with affection.; 2:34 PTG